Show, don't tell.
The dialogue is very stilted and unnatural.
The MCs thought processes are unnatural as well.
Humans don't talk or think even remotely like this.
But because I've read only the first chapter I will refrain from giving an actual rating.

Now that I've had more experience with YA and Middle-Grade books, I notice a few more things.
First of all, in author notes of other books (I sometimes read the author notes, depends) They call this series a YA series. However, I feel like this book tries so hard to be YA and it just isn't really, to me, it feels like a middle grade. At times, the book acts like a YA novel, other times like a middle grade.
It was short and light, with some errors but didn't really take away from the book.
One of the characters is blind yet sometimes, she describes visual features like what?
The cast of characters is ultimately enjoyable, well the majority of them.

While this was enjoyable, at times it was hard to follow, the transition between the two girls came off sometimes as very abrupt and choppy. AT times, both POV's sounded the same and it was hard to differentiate. ( )